First we see Alexander crawling through a hole to get to the city, well I would make him jump over a fence to get to the other side because it looks more rebel and it looks like he’s actually running away. I would have a crane shot starting off low then following and looking at him on a side profile angle then the camera swivelling to look over at the city. Next instead of seeing the low angle shots of the buildings I would have an aerial shot of the buildings then a close up of Alexander’s face depressed and shocked. Then low angle shots of the buildings. I would keep him walking down the street listening to the chaos in the background then a slow 360 degree pan looking up and around at the skyscrapers. Now instead of Alex asking for the times I would have him look into a clock shop to see the time then look up to this lonely old guy fixing watches, then back to MCU of Alex as he walks away. The music I would keep the same at the moment because that piece of music also goes with other scenes and is the main piece of music that goes with the film. I would also keep the part where it changes to dark and we see Alex crossing the road to the city mission place. I would start off with a slow and low move back track of people’s feet before seeing tracking of everyone’s faces and the city mission sign. Also the lighting is great for this part because it give an airy sort of feeling. I would also make the main character look a little bit more scruffy and dirty and maybe a couple of scars in his arms and tears on his bag. When Alex is talking to the lady about losing his ID well we keep seeing the same three shots repeated why not chuck in a couple close ups of the lady writing his name and a side shot rather than switching between people with the same shot. All the lines that are being told I would keep because we need to follow the story. I don’t like the shot where they use the camera as if someone is watching him and the camera isn’t steady, it does not suite that part in the scene even if their are a lot of people around. Its a little bit distracting when you hear something drop in the background your concentration is instantly disrupted which is why I think that part is not entirely necessary. I part where he moves past the bunk bed I would take out and just have the shot of a close up when he puts his gear in a locker and locks it. I really like the editing when we see other people freeze when Alex looks at him, it is a well used technique to capture the audience and background sounds makes it even more freaky. I would change the music and make it louder and sharper to not only scare the audience but to give them the full intensity of Alex’s emotions. I like the low shutter speed used by the camera to give the effect that Alex is seeing but with these shots I reckon it should start off out of focus then come in focus with the low shutter speed to give a more accurate feeling. I think it would look more interesting if we saw police cars in the tunnel rather than a boring car and he should be walking along a bridge as well with a high shot zooming into him, Alex looks up and the shot freezes. The slow motion talk and laughter is greatly used which I would keep but I would have a more intimate moment when Alex sees him as that person. Instead of Alex sitting down and looking, I would have him walking past that guy which is having a drink and Alex would accidently knock it over then a freeze frame then him as that person smiling and saying waiter another please as if he could have been wealthy. I like the echoes of people’s voices which also gives a scary feeling. Instead of a side tracking shot as Alex suddenly leaves the city mission place, I would have the tracking shot low looking at his bag then moving up and around to the front of Alex to show him leaving and the lady at reception speaking. Far more interesting than just a plain tracking shot. At the end I would have a fully out of focus shot of the city then a quick cut to Alex’s face. Then an extreme close-up as a tear drips off his face. I would keep the silhouette part of him as he walks off into the distance.
So that’s how I would change the scene.
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